Five Ways to Make Your First Page Better

At one of my first writers conferences (the amazing Pikes Peak Writers Conference), one of the sessions I attended was called a Read and Critique. Each audience member brought two copies of their manuscript's first page, and read it aloud in front of a literary agent--and the writers in the room. After each writer read, the agent commented on what she liked or didn't like about the first page, and whether she would keep on reading. It was definitely not for the faint of heart!

Though I was really nervous as a new writer, I learned a lot that day. Here's a glimpse back:

Twenty-five writers sit tensed in their chairs, palms sweating, throats clearing. Clutched in each pair of hands: a single page. Each sheet contains just 16 lines, but those lines hold power over each writer’s future.

As the agent steps into the room, 25 sets of eyes follow her and shine with questions. “Will she like it? Maybe a little?” “Will all these people snicker at the words I’ve written?”

A few sly glances gauge the distance to the exit, should the worst happen.
The agent, Sandra Bond, clears her throat (did she rub her palms on her slacks?) and surprises us all. “I’m much more nervous than all of you,” she says. It dawns on us that she is in the hot seat, having only five minutes to listen to and pass judgment on another’s writing.

Whether or not that makes us feel better, it does remind us that agents are human. They don’t like rejection any more than the rest of us. Sandra’s vulnerability eases some of the tension in the room.

As the writers stand and read from their pages, Sandra gives excellent, specific constructive criticisms, which add up to the equivalent of a wonderful seminar on how to hook a reader. Here are some highlights:

The first sentence is paramount. Start with a graphic, visual scene—action, tension, dark humor. Don’t confuse your reader with the first line, hoping they’ll keep reading to figure it out. They’re more likely to put it down. If your first line or paragraph doesn’t grab the friends you test it out on, try ditching it and begin with your second paragraph. Sandra says this won’t always work, but it’s worth a try.

Show your character’s personality immediately. Whether it’s through humor and sarcasm, or fear and paranoia, let your reader see your character’s quirks and sensitivities. What are the “must haves” or “can’t stands” in their world?

Beware the prologue. While many successful authors use them, Sandra warns that writers must be aware that lots of readers skip them. If your prologue reveals something crucial to the story, weave the information into your novel, or turn the prologue into chapter one.

Use the senses to pull in the reader. Two submissions that seemed to be popular with Sandra and the group as a whole, employed this idea. One focused on several unusual smells that helped connect us to what the main character liked and didn’t like. Another used sound—a particular sound brings back snatches of memories from the lead character’s life—and makes us want to know what sound stirred up these recollections.

If you’re tackling a memoir... Sandra noted that memoirs are a difficult genre to get into. In order to distinguish yours, accentuate your voice to make it compelling and unique. She told us that a memoir should never begin with, “When I was nine...” Find the voice that will grab your reader.

Attending a Read & Critique session helped me realize that I could not only survive reading aloud in a group, but pick up some great writing tips as well. 

Have you overcome your fears and read in a group? 


  1. I have no fears when it comes to reading in a group, or reading to a group of writers, because we have a like-minded understanding in terms of our goals and aspirations. However, I highly fear reading my writing to friends and family, or giving them my writing to read, which I am sure is a common fear amongst writers. I would say it's the only complex I have about my writing (at the moment, LOL!).

  2. It is hard to share with people who know us, but some writers really get anxious about sharing with writers who "know" good and bad writing. I wrote about a true incident from my life for an anthology, and it was a little disconcerting knowing that friends and family would read about the raw moment in my life. But everyone has been incredibly supportive. Hope you find that, too!


  3. I read part of a short story at the Oshawa Literary Festival in Ontario, Canada.

    I was so nervous, the microphone picked up the sounds of the pages shaking as I turned them. I despise reading aloud to people. I hate people watching me, and I really, really don't like it when an entire room goes silent just before I open my mouth.

    I can write stuff no problem, but expressing out loud to people I don't know, or do know, for that matter, is distressing.

    My palms go sweaty even thinking about it!

    That said, it's something I'll have to do more often if ever I become successful. I should practice it more often.

  4. You deserve extreme kudos for getting up there. A literary festival? They would have heard my teeth chattering. Small groups probably won't bother you now after that experience. Good for you! And the more you do it, the easier it gets. Really.


  5. I've always enjoyed telling a good story to a group...I'm not sure how I'd react, though, if it were my own story! I should look up an opportunity and find out!


  6. PS. Your writer's conference sounds like a lot of fun!


  7. Pikes Peak Writers is a local organization in Colorado Springs, but they put on a fantastic conference. All the agents I spoke to were quite impressed with it. I don't know where you are, but it's worth the trip.




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